Thursday, April 28, 2011
3 Questions about Research Paper
2. When we include our opinions are we supposed to keep it formal without literally stating "this is my opinion?"
3.
Adding more content
1. How can expand on the existing content without making the paper boring with details.
2. What can I add without diverting out of the main topic?
3. I also have some reservations on what is considered good writing - in this "Argumentative Research paper". The samples I have read differ so widely.
- Do I have to support and argue every point in each paragraph or just some, or the opposing points to my paper?
Science and Uncertainty
How do I give a good conclusion for the paper?
I have troubles giving a good conclusion for putting together everything i have researched in to a single paragraph
What does the conclusion have to do in for the paper?
Glass Bottle Reuse
2: I tend to jump around a little bit with the narrative voice of my paper. I like to give personal examples, in first person, and then I tend to ask questions of my reader in second voice. I also take a third person narrative when explaining the legal processes.
3: I think it would be helpful to have a final review day on Tuesday and turn in the final copy on Thursday.
Final Countdown
At this point in time I dont feels as if i will have a problem with length but that never shows untill the night before its due!
Im also concernd that once this class is over I will not be able to go on! This was one of the best, most interesting classes i have ever taken!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHOS WITH ME ?
Final paper, questions and concerns
problems with paper
Saucy
2. Having trouble reaching the 12 sources, looking at about 8-10 right now.
3. What websites have access to academic journals?
Ghosts
2. I might have have too much evidence for ghosts and not enough for the skeptic side, even though I am a skeptic.
3.???
Thesis Questions and Concerns
1. Propositioning a good counter arguement after a main point. An example would be how in my paper, I talk about the language and harshness of the tone Andrew Jackson uses in the Indian Removal Act of 1830. I also talk about the bills ramifications towards Native Americans and how there is a huge anti-sematism towards them. The counter-argument that I offer is that both the Congress and President Jackson were very likely looking out for the Cherokee Indians' best interest.
2. Ending the paper. Unfortunately, I am unsure of how this paper will end. I have the culmination of all the events leading up to and into the Trail of Tears and the steady decline of American Politics into said event. I am wondering whether I could simply reiterate the main strong points of argument, refute main counter points, then simply conclude with my ending opinion.
Questions/Concerns About Paper
questions on final paper
For starters it is on genetically modified organisms... super dry and sciency topic, but how would I make it not so dry and sciency?
There are many instances where I need to define vocabulary so I can use the big words that come with the topic... It is a very complicated subject, and I feel like there is no way around that.
My other question is about my thesis. All I really say is that people should be more educated about the food that we eat. It is a bit broad, so I was told to "rework" it... would a better thesis, for this particular assignment, be that I think people should know more about the food we eat AND on top of that, I think that companys like Monsanto (a chemical herbicide company) should be banned from the market because of all the horror stories about our food production?
Who lives in a pineapple under the sea?
1) How can I make sure that when I switch from one topic and go to the next one?
2) What are some organizational tools to help me make it flow?
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How do you cite the same source multiple times in one paragraph?
Concerns
Another concern is using correct MLA style for my sources.
Thursday, March 31, 2011
Annotated Bibliography on Caffeine
Claim: Caffeine beverages have been around for centuries and the concerns about the effects of caffeine have followed. Today, companies have come out with more energy drinks and the question has been raised about regulating the amount of caffeine in drinks. Regulating the amount of caffeine would be beneficial because high levels of caffeine can be dangerous.
Carpenter, Murray. “A Century Later, Jury’s Still Out on Caffeine Limits.”The New York Times. 28 March 2011.
The article in the New York Times titled, A Century Later, Jury’s Still Out on Caffeine Limits addresses the issue of high caffeine levels in beverages from the past to present. The focus of the article is about how there was a trial in 1911 against Coca-Cola. Coca-Cola was on trial because there was a concern about the levels of caffeine in their product. Research was done by Harry Levi Hollingworth ,a psychology professor, for the trial and he found that caffeine did have an effect on humans and one effect included a “Gradual rise of spirits till 4:00. Then a period of exuberance, of good feeling. Fanciful ideas rampant.” The conclusion of the trial was that the case was dismissed and this issue is still debated today. This article was detailed about the trial and how the issue of caffeine levels is still a concern. In supporting the claim, the professor’s research would be useful, but the other details of the trial would not be helpful. The article mentioned that Harry Levi Hollingworth compiled his research into a book called The Influence of Caffeine on Mental and Motor Efficiency and this would be a great follow up source.
Wednesday, March 30, 2011
Articles
Thursday, March 17, 2011
yes i have done a annotative bib once in high school.
liked
Interesting
Overall I had a good time.
Reflection of the Exploratory Essay
Some of the aspects of the paper that were difficult to work with was the length. I felt I had a stooping point that was satisfying to me, but it did not work with the page length requirement. This challenged me, but I felt I was lacking ideas by the end of the paper.
My focus for my paper is the benefits of Ayurveda alternative medicine.
Exploratory Essay, Explored?
I really do not have any experience with annotated biographies.
Things I didn't like about writing this paper would have to have been the length requirement, of course. I'm still having trouble trying to get the full amount of pages in without being too wordy and without putting useless information in.
I think the main focus for my research will be how has racism changed over time.
3/17
Today's Thoughts on Exploratory Essay
Exploratory Essay
Did you hear that?
The end result
Exbroatory essay
Its was kinda a strange paper to write about, because I had no idea on how to format the paper so i got confused at some points, but I really liked learning new things about my subject, and narrating my actions.
New questions:
Uncertainites of Science and how they affect human beings
Experience with annotated bibliographies:
I have none, besides the practice example we did in class the other day, hopefully it will be easy.
Eggs
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My new question isn't necessarily definitive at this point, but I think it will be something pertaining to the either the economics of biodynamic farming or about the rise in small scale/local farming.
Reflection of Exploratory Essay
My focus on research on this topic from here toward the argumentative thesis still aligns with what I had original interest in which was what happened in America to allow something like the Trail of Tears to happen. I may shift my focus more toward the legislation passed or the major political figureheads, yet it was the law (or lack thereof) that seemed to incite unrest.
I have no formal experience with annotated bibliographies. I have covered the background information on where it is used and the general format. However, this knowledge has never been translated and it has been 4 years since my last experience with an English course.
Paper evaluation
I liked how I was able to analyze different research I found on fad diets and kind of develop my own opinion about them. I was able to come up with some good theories to answer my question of why people fall for fad diets. Something I did not like about my paper was the last couple of paragraphs--I was not able to come up with as many questions as I did in the first part of my paper.
New questions/focus for research:
I came up with some questions about self-image and the knowledge that people have about dieting. I think I could focus my research on something like the relationship between self-esteem and weight struggles.
Experience with annotated bibliographies:
I took an English class last year at CU Boulder and I remember doing an annotated bibliography there for my research paper. From what I remember, I had to find sources and write a paragraph basically summarizing what the source said.
Exploratory Essay
As for experience with annoted bibliographies, I dont really have any. I was never asked to do them before, but from the looks of it, its a good way to describe the sources you used in order for someone else to jumpstart their own research.
Thursday, March 10, 2011
titles
1) Biochemica engineering
then i noticed that this title was to broad and well i would have to cover a lot of things so now I chose
2) Nano Robotics
which makes my topic a lot more clear and easy for people to guess what my essay would be about. I dont really have a third title but perhaps their may be other good titles that i can choose. :)
Suffering for science and food for thought
Learning about animal testing can make an animal lover change their diet to a vegetarian or vegan lifestyle. Because I am a vegetarian I have decided to write about the connection between animal testing ans vegetarianism/veganism. The title I had originally chosen for this paper was " Animal Testing and Vegetarianism- Information about animal testing and vegetarians" but then I thought about it and decided to change it to " Suffering for Science and Food for Thought.-A paper regarding animal testing and vegetarianism"
Title
Chemical Weapons: do you smell that?
Chemical weapons and the world we live in
Chemical weapons and ethics
Biological warfare: and indepth study on the history of germ warfare
Titles
Dieting Obsession
The Allure of Fad Diets
Fad Diets and the Desire to be Perfect
Titles for Alternative Medicine Paper
Alternative Medicine: Past and Present ways of Healing
Alternative Medicine: A Healthier way of Healing
Titles
The skeptic vs. the believer
Ghosts: Real or part of our imagination
OMG> NO> WAY>.
1. SNOW: Ski Company
2. SNOW: Empresa De Esqui
3. SaucyApples: Ski Company
4. SNOW SPORTS: Companies, how they start.
Alternative Titles for Exploratory Essay
Cherokee Nation and the Trail of Tears: Suppression of a People
Trail and Trial: A Cherokee Nation Shaken.
Exploratory Essay Titles
What Next: Color Vision and Its Purpose
Why Do Humans See in Color?
New Titles:
Destiny: Are we all doomed?
Destiny: Analysis of Dna, Destruction, And Doom
Destiny: Breaking the chains
some of the titles that might work for my paper could be:
1. What really happened; the Iran revolution.
2. The revolution of Iran in 1974.
3. The down fall of Iran; 1974.
4. who's to blame for the Iranian revolution?
3 titles..
Genetically Modified Organisms: The Stuff Veg Heads Eat.
Meat Replacements: What People Don't Know.
They fight just like real people!
Plastic Surgery: Botched and Uncut
Botox: Plastic Surgery Unveiled
Social Pressue: Plastic Surgery
Thursday, February 24, 2011
Another haiku?
As lovely as her eyes
she had really big thighs?
But nows shes is dead
Because of the evil Bread
Mc, Donalds, Thank you
Haiku
Haikus are five, seven, five
They are very fun
Haikus are easy
Something you must not worry
with that I shall end????
Weaknesses
Genre Analysis Paper
Genre Paper
Genre Analysis process
Then, through the work shops and and some proof reading by friends of mine, I started condensing the paragraphs to a much focused content and it was much better at the end, I hope, of course.
paper
To add on what I struggled with when writing this paper I had trouble with the actual purpose for writing this essay because I know we were supposed to argue about how the rhetoric of our genre influences people but when trying to meet the 5 page requirement my paper began to be more about informing people about weight loss pills which might in turn might have hurt my paper in the long run.
Genre Analysis Reflection
I seemed to have valid points and arguments which I elaborated on and related it to my topic of comedy movie covers. I had an outline that flowed and made sense with the topic, which I had trouble with in the past--I was very pleased with how my paper turned out. I changed my topic a few times through drafts of this paper, the topic I ended up with was a narrowed down version of the comedy movie genre (comedy movie covers) which made it much easier to analyze. I was able to analyze certain tactics and styles of these covers/advertisements and relate it to the genre of movie.
One of the in class excersises that helped me write my paper was the confereces and peer editing because I was able to say what I was writing about and explain my analysis. Being able to express my thoughts out loud and get others feedback helped me decide what to include in my paper and how to include it.
Reflection
After thoughts, Microbrew Labels
Helpful .. things
What I need help with:
rendered beef fat popsicle
You're Cooler Than The Ice Cubes In My Freezer!
First Assignment Overview
Overall outcome
Genre Analysis Paper
Peer reviewing went really well. I think I was able to grasp more ideas about what to adjust in my paper from reading other student's papers. It also gave me insight about how to go about things when it came to organization, word choice and sentence structure. Also the feedback helped to remind me of what I missed, and to compliment me on what I did well in my paper.
ENGL 2030 - Genre Analysis and Beyond
For the class, the structure of review for the paper was very good. Peer review as well as an individual conferencing session with the professor allowed for many different perspectives on what could be improved on and how the paper was coming along. Along with peers looking at content,(as with any English class), proper structure of the paper itself was critiqued to allow for maximum efficiency of message.
Most problematic areas for me so far are being concise, as well as my writing style not being remotely close to how I speak.
WORKER BEEZZZZ
Thursday, February 17, 2011
Other source
Looking at this water labels, comparing it to soda labels there are some similarities but the differences are easily seen. For example, the demographic for soda is international but the demographic for this drink is only for people at Yale University at what the bottle says is "dining services". It's odd that the university would take this much time to create their own brand of water. The label also differs because instead of a simple color scheme, it contains a picture of the university but also has a picture of a flat surface covered in drops of water. The label does have a nutrition label but lacks any real ingredient list except mentioning sodium information. The makers of the label seem to be very interested in letting their customers know where the water was from and who it is for. This is different because most soda labels have no mention of where the drink was made and who it is for because it is redundant and not needed when all we need to know is the name of the drink or the company that makes the drink.
Additional Souce for Humanitarian websites genre
This source will add to my analysis paper because this source shows the extent humanitarian organization websites go through to engage the audience and convince them to help. This websites is extensive in the amount of organization, language, representation of credibility, and imagery to unite people to join the cause. Care.org will be a supportive piece to the genre analysis because this humanitarian website has strength in all the persuasive techniques in gathering people for a cause, so more people in poverty do not die and suffer.
http://care.org
Example of Genre
This is an example of my genre of romantic comedies and how movies of this genre and their advertising are all similar in such a way that catches their target audience. The aspect that I am focusing on with this example is the slogan which reads, "Imagine having to win over the girl of your dreams, every friggin' day". The vast majority of movie covers have a slogan to explain the movie, but romantic comedies have to pick a slogan that depicts the movie as light-hearted and funny, yet cute and romantic at the same time. The slogan portrays that because any movie where a guy has to win over a girl, is obviously going to be romantic to some extent. Using vocabulary like 'friggin' suggests that there is going to be some comedy in the movie.
A little extra genre, a lot better paper.
The Hill Bros. provide yet another source for comparison in the genre of coffee cans. What is interesting about this brand is that the image on the can is a subsidary to the text that seems to command the entire attention of its audience. Still holding true to the genre, the text is bold and its colors are mellow. Also adorning the front, not disappointing the rhetoric at all are the "blend" and "boldness" of the coffee as well. While no specific motto is shown, there is a message that suffices in its place. The trusted coffee since 1879.
Though through its uniqueness, it is still an adequate source to require a revision of content within my essay.
Genre Analysis Fourth Example
http://image.lyricspond.com/image/i/artist-iris/album-wrath/cd-cover.jpg
This album cover features what appears to be barbed wire spread across desert sand. Like the covers of both the Edge of Dawn and Kidneythieves albums, the Iris cover depicts the band's name in large letters with the title of the album in smaller letters below. Unlike the other album covers that I have explored, this cover also features the words of all the album's song titles scattered chaotically across the image of desert sand. Similar to the other bands of this genre, the desolate Iris cover is a connotation for the dark tones of the music of the genre. Furthermore, the lyrics of "Lands of Fire," the first song on the album, suggest a feeling of being lost in a metaphorical desert in life, and, like the three album covers that I analyzed for my paper, the image on the cover is organized with the sound of the music to focus on heavy concepts within the lyrics of the songs.
More examples of Graffiti
On this website there are several pictures of graffiti, but only one of which I would like to focus on. The "no entry" sign that this website shows has the "o" covered with "inja" and two slanty eyes in the white space. In doing this, the sign says ninja entry... and the sign looks like a ninja. This type of graffiti is silly graffiti, and many people could argue that there is no point to it. The only reason people do silly graffiti is for humor. However, I could argue in my paper that this kind of graffiti still has a purpose and still conveys a lot of information about the author. One who doesw silly graffiti obviously has good humor, and depending on how ironic or what induendos are included can tell audiences what interests they have. Although this genre is easily read and not usually very colorful, the words itself and creations are enough to create a giddy feeling.
Ski Magazine
This cover is unique to this genre because it has text behind the image. Usually the text is in a place that doesn't intrude on the image. Which is this case the text doesn't really intrude on the image but becomes part of the image. This aspect makes it an unique part of this genre.
Get ripped fast!
I have chosen this article to elaborate a couple more things about this genre. As it is currently, I mostly talk about one type of snowboarding but there are more out there. Aside from "stunt riding" or "park riding" there is also Alpine snowboarding which is featured in the winter olympics. This article does a great job explaining what alpine snowboarding is. It shares with the reader a good insight to what it's purpose is and the necessary equipment needed if someone were to be interested in picking up a new hobby over the winter. This article is what I would call an informational one. It follows the rules of dialect; talking about what alpine snowboarding is and why people enjoy it. At the same time, it breaks the rules through its absence of pictures and captions, often found within the pages of such articles.
New source
http://www.theaxeeffect.com/#/axe-products/instinct-shower-gel
This source is the collection of Axe shampoo lines. I want to add this source because I can then compare the different ways the Axe company uses different genre for different products. For example the purpose of the genre is to show young males that they can get as many woman as possibble, while smelling good. The purpose of genre used for the shampoo is looking good for the ladies.
new source
I only used one example to analyze for my paper so I think another would help me further my analysis. I think it would also help to show how weight loss pills are alike and also how they are different. For example I found many different ads that do not choose to include a model with their ad for whatever reason. I feel sometimes these can be less effective when trying to pull in a potential buyer because most people are hooked when they see a product working for somebody else. It shows how successful the product is proven to be.
This website gives a lot of information on different supplements and also people's reviews on them. I think that would would help my paper a great deal .
clubbin' baby seals
Harpooning Whales
New Source
Legacy
Okay so, that is a picture of the book cover Legacy by Cayla Kluver. Cayla was only 16 when she finished writing Legacy, which is her first book she has ever written. Being an unknown author, her book defies the standards that most fantasy book covers have. Instead of having darker tones dabbled across the cover, Cayla's cover is a dulled red with an intricate gold border. The title of her novel is dead center in the book with her name right underneath it. This leaves little room for the acutual picture on her cover, which is only big enough to take up a decent portion of the cover left underneath the title.
Thursday, February 3, 2011
My Writing Process
Drafting
Drafting
When writing a draft I start with a thesis statement and bullet point the main topic of each body paragraph. Once I have the main supporting ideas for my paper I outline the details and examples I will incorporate in each paragraph. To outline a conclusion, I write a concluding statement that relates back to the thesis of the paper.
After making a clear outline I begin to free write to make a rough draft. I usually write several different thesis statements and figure out which fits best into the paper after I have written more of my body paragraphs. In the introduction I briefly state the topic and supporting points. I continue my free write with writing topic sentences for each or my body paragraphs. I support my body paragraphs with detailed descriptions and examples. I then tie the paragraph back to the main idea and transition to the next topic.
That is one process.
And other times, I start with an outline. What should be my title, and how should the intro be, the ideas in it. Then the body of the paper, and the conclusion, etc. Then the expanding process begins.
And sometimes, I start from the body of the paper and then work on the intro and conclusion.
First draft
Writing techniques
Revision Process
Free Writing
Writing Style
My writing style
My drafting process...
Drafting Process
rough draft
How we go about drafting and stuff
How I go about drafting:
Step one:
I write all the idea down that I can, and begin typing my essay. I type and type and type putting down my thoughts no matter how crazy they are. I continue this process till I have the total number of pages required by the assignment.
Step two:
After doing all the fun stuff, it is not time for me to edit out all the thoughts, and unnecessary vocabulary. This in my opinion takes the longest time for me. In this step I also reorganized my thoughts and ideas and makes sure that the paper at least makes some sense.
Step Three:
This is where I add more information and facts that I find on my own, at the same time while I cite them. While I’m adding the information to my writing, I use the information to support my argument.
Step Four:
After all that I reread my paper and make more corrections to grammar, thoughts, and organization.
Step Five:
Turn it in the next day.
Rafting, Drafting... whatever Blaaa!
untitled
Monkeys Attack Polar Bears, pt.2
Thursday, January 27, 2011
Genres on the internet
Soda labels
Graffiti
Usually the only rules for graffiti is to put it where it can be seen by everyone. Big signs, trains, building walls, and cars are usually ideal for graffitiing so that it can catch people's eyes. In order to break the rules but still have the same outcome I think drawing graffiti on paper and handing them out on campus would still work, however that kind of defeats the purpose of having a secret identity and what not. I think you could really graffiti anything, a brochure or poster even and still catch the eye of your audience because the genre is so detailed and creative.
Magazine Covers
Soda vs. Juice
Physics textbooks
I chose my samples from my library of books that I have at my house. These particular three may cover 3 different subsections of physics, and have 3 different authors, but it is what they attempt to convey which is the most interesting aspect to me.
The most poignant feature of rhetoric that I find myself intrigued by is the imagery. How each image, color, and styling of text, sends subtle messages.
The rules of the genre seem to imply that the title is explicitly stated on the front near the top, along with an author. Other than that, as long as the publisher is included on the binding at least and elsewhere if appropriate, all else is left to the imagination. The rule of title could be broken quite easily. A title could be manipulated to any section of the front, not necessarily at the top. It could be assuaged into art or simply put as something toward the bottom, since it is only briefly looked at before a consideration of the content within is desired. Other than that, the style of text could be the only other manipulated ingredient.